Those kissy scenes are hard to write sometimes, but I love reading one when it's crafted so well it feels like I'm standing beside the characters, watching with inflamed cheeks as sparks fly between the two lovebirds.
Please share one of your favorite kissing scenes from a book you've read, from your own WiP, make one up, or write about one of your own memorable kisses. Then hop around to feel how sweet, romantic, or downright steamy other characters are getting smooched!
Interestingly enough I actually have a kissing scene in one of my works in progress, and I wasn't sure how I liked it. So this will kill two birds with one stone... I think that is the right metaphoric...any way before I post the scene(s) something you should know. Remember that little except I wrote right before my hiatus? Yeah this takes place in the same world. This is from my story that was originally My attempt at writing a science fiction, now I am hoping to change it into a fantasy that takes place in a space like setting. Something else you should know, Elliot is blind.
Love in Flight or Intimacy
Thea:
Thea sat at the controls of her ship piloting was so simple, why couldn't
everything else be this simple? She sighed, this job was going to be
a disaster. Two hours ago she had checked on her passengers only to find
them arguing in on the observation deck. It was going to take a
miracle to get them all to work together.
Suddenly
but gently she felt warm hands start to rub her shoulders, She
jumped.
“So
tense,” said Elliot. “you worry too much.”
she
sighed as every muscle relaxed under his touch. “I don't know how
this plan is going to work.”
“It
will,” he assured her, “I even promise to try and be nicer to
Leo.:
“Really?”
sarcasm and disbelief filled her tone.
“I
said try.”
she
grinned.
They
were then silent a while as Elliot continued to rub her shoulders.
She dropped her head to her chest.
“What
did you mean when you called Ki a sunset?”
“Are
you jealous my sun rise?” he asked light heatedly.
“no”
she answered quickly.
Elliot
chuckled. “You both are very similar, full of life, hope promise
and dreams. These things shine like the sun. You believe in them and
thus the night filled with fears and doubts has no power over you. Ki, has to
fight to believe. She wants to be she is afraid and thus the night is
conquering her.”
“Why
is she afraid.”
“Secrets
take energy to keep, and and there is the consent fear of discovery.”
His
hands soothed Thea's muscles and she felt herself falling under his
spell. He kissed the back of her neck. “Elliot.” she said trying
to break the spell.
He
kissed her again this time near her ear lobe.
She
turned her chair resolved to not let this happen, but his hands
followed her movements and his lips found hers.
Elliot
Elliot
always had a hard time explaining to people what it was he saw. He
was blind, his eyes had been burned and stared out of his face dead
and cold. But he did see. Some times he did not even understand what
it was he saw. Emotions, secrets, past wounds, future dreams and
hopes these gave the people around him form, and color. Or at least
it felt like color mixed with scents warmth and cold. He knew his
eyes did not bring to him anything of the world around him, but he
could still see. It wasn't that he could know everything about every
person he passed. For most people he only saw, or sensed their most
present emotions. But any person if he disregarded the personal
privacy of those around him he could look closely at the tapestry of
their lives he could follow single threads, or at least he should be
able to. He had been so afraid of that ability and what he might find
woven into the tapestry of a persons life that he never exercised
that power.
Others
were more visible to him being filled with vivid colors that over
powered him. That was what Thea was like, more so now then normal as
she opened herself to him. Her warmth, happiness, and yes even her
sorrow washed over him like the sun rise washing over the land and
bathing it is light. Her hopes and dreams were shared with him in
waves of reds and golds.
(by the way, this will be replacing this month's Out of the Note Book post.)
13 comments:
Love Elliot and what he *does* see... that whole bit and idea is beautiful. The "waves of reds and golds" when Thea is open to him, very nice. :D
That's such a cool scene. Maybe love isn't blind after all. Good one! :)
I love how Elliot views people. His vision seems vibrant. Thanks for sharing this!
Elliot's vision is super cool and I like the tension in the kiss scene. This is a great post. The different POVs work well.
That was amazing - such vivid colours :) Great post!
I love a kiss that starts with a back rub! I say keep it for sure:)
Love this scene. Great writing!
WOW! LOVED this! So perfect! Great job!
Awesome POV's! I love how he compares them to sunset/sinrise, beautiful and romantic! Cool concept behind this too!
Nice! I also like your description of Elliot. Very vivid. Captures the imagination. :-)
Super romantic! Elliot, won't you be mine?
I just want to thank everyone for their nice comments, and encouragement. This is from a world sand box that I have been playing around in sense my second year of college.
Elliot's POV is so cool. I love how he "sees" those around him. Nice!
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